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Spoken Word: Lost
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Spoken Word: Lost

Can you all give me some feedback on this spoken word video I've made for school? Thank you! Any help would be much appreciated!! 
https://youtu.be/kYe09ymaA_M
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RE: Spoken Word: Lost

the piece itself is fine, but why didn't u do retakes cause u have some mistakes here and there

or edit it.
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Sis this was golden
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RE: Spoken Word: Lost

(04 Dec 2018, 01:30 AM)leona Wrote: Can you all give me some feedback on this spoken word video I've made for school? Thank you! Any help would be much appreciated!! 
https://youtu.be/kYe09ymaA_M

I like it, but i would recommend you stop mumbling over your words and try your best not to do retakes.
If you're gonna perform this @ your school i recommend practicing the piece and add more power, also make sure you're much more passionate about your piece and put more effort. 
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Rip editing.
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RE: Spoken Word: Lost

You're 18 (probably younger), why are you this depressed? I get life/school can he hard but this is a little extreme especially for a young person. Also did you film this at school or something, I can hear kids in the background.
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(24 Dec 2018, 02:42 PM)Apollo Wrote: You're 18 (probably younger), why are you this depressed? I get life/school can he hard but this is a little extreme especially for a young person. Also did you film this at school or something, I can hear kids in the background.

I am 18 and I honestly don’t know what I was thinking or going through when I made this, but I know I am still learning how to control and get a hold of my emotions
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