[SmG Riley_isbatman803]

I enjoyed reading this. I'm waiting for the next one you post. A few suggestions though... I seemed to read this in the same tone. You should attempt to change the punctuation and tone used. Also try varying your sentence length.

I guess the way that I tried to write this is to have it all in a kind of somber voice, like this whole piece to me is someone struggling with an addiction of letting the worst part of himself get the better of him. But if you notice how I can edit it and make it better in specific parts, please let me know.